Grateful to Haiku Society of America & the Judges Marcyn Del Clements & Seren Fargo for awarding our #rengay “Thirst” 3rd place (tied).
Billie Dee —you are the best, it was a delight to collaborate and write with you. We made it to the winners list again this year! 💕💕
JUDGES COMMENTARY:
Thirst has such delightful images, like a painting from Van Gogh.
~Marcyn Del Clements
Perfect title. Another well-crafted rengay, with satisfying variation between the verses, while staying true to the theme. I don’t know if the title was decided on before or after the rengay itself was written, but it is another perfect example of how important the title is. In this case, it reflects the commonality within the verses, but in an indirect, somewhat subtle fashion. No one verse actually mentioned ‘thirst.’ I also found great satisfaction in this rengay’s employment of so many of the physical senses — from the “papaya’s bitter edge” to “a whiff of afternoon toil.” Wonderfully provocative. Polishing it off so well, it ends with the full and rich imagery of a pregnant tabby lapping from an oxcart rut. Superb.
~Seren Fargo
